tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6084696062507942783.post6673380139388668631..comments2015-09-19T03:11:26.365-07:00Comments on Grace's Blog: WritingAliceMoosehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08563494502668110700noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6084696062507942783.post-5681317522592338102014-03-17T18:06:41.290-07:002014-03-17T18:06:41.290-07:00I love how you used adverbs like suddenly and slow...I love how you used adverbs like suddenly and slowly. It creates suspense as I read. Well done. I wonder if some other language features could help build this. Perhaps you could add some on your next draft.Ebony Maakahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04278822081519785920noreply@blogger.com