Monday, 17 March 2014


W.A.L.T: Entertain (recount)
Feedback:You added lots of verbs, juicy words and Similes
Feedfoward:Add more Personifercation, and Adverbs.

1 comment:

  1. I love how you used adverbs like suddenly and slowly. It creates suspense as I read. Well done. I wonder if some other language features could help build this. Perhaps you could add some on your next draft.